Thursday, March 27, 2008

Waiting at the bell

[Disclaimer: This is an imaginary piece of work in its entirety and does not have any concurrence with any of your real-world instance; If any of you found this similar to any of your real-life instances, I assure you that it is purely a coincidence.]


Waiting at the bell, she conquered

her wheting desires of a sweet call;

seconds … thirds and fourths ran

clogging and never like a water fall;

she began to wait for hundreds of dozens

of time-units that steadied with a crawl;

not a call yet, not a tone yet.

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

the memories of her recent past;

her loved one soothing her in all happenings

that weren’t bitter and never last;

she roamed her living-room for she would hear

that 'tring' beckoning her fast;

she was happy 'then' and never now,

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

a message from her next born one;

took the instance to her credit and

moved a bit far to her loved one;

she probed him: ‘where is He? Is He there still –

as his call would be prompt in any case,

even if it has a fee’;

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

with her saying: the deed weighs a trivial pound,

but the heart and the mind for that endeavor

do weigh a trillion, two cents-per-cent;

he was awed for a while, caught in ignominy before

steadily buzzing that he had work;

she too wanted to say that she has one; but

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

a thought – uneasy and not so congenial;

she uttered to ‘end it all’ – does it endorse

a solution? she unfelt so, nevertheless, asserted otherwise;

he was shocked, and she was emotion-struck;

priceless liquid crystals rolling over his cheeks, and

hers was denser – all these sentiments were over the wire; but

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

the inquiry about a piece of paper, dated a week back;

neither a sniff, nor a whisper hung around

when the issue was at the rack;

she mumbled that this subject existed during their biking along the streets, but

all through, his discussions deficient in talking about it;

His panting consequential of rapid cycling forbade his speech? She guessed;

still she inquired of his hidden openness; and

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

a giggle from him for her query

being – ‘Is she worried in your absence?’ After moments

of over-working thought processes, the reply quoted ‘I don’t know ’;

she found the answer long back and kept saying ‘It’s there in thy mouth;

and I shall never want to hear them unless thou shall deliver’;

his words coagulated and his breathing pendulum sped;

priceless liquid crystals rolling over his cheeks, and

hers was denser – all these sentiments were over the wire; but

She waited to conquer -

She waited to conquer -



Waiting at the bell, she conquered

and stumbled upon the sniffles of his weep;

for a moment, she felt her world was dying on her earpiece;

even, his universe was muted amidst a few hundred decibels polluting around;

he unwrapped his biological warmth from within, opened his mouth: “I Love Thee”;

priceless liquid crystals rolling over his cheeks, and

hers was denser – all these sentiments were over the wire;

moments of silence, moments of tranquility, moments of smiles

contaminated by the left-over sobs filled their cosmos; seconds … thirds and fourths ran;

She conquered;

yet she was conquered.

10 comments:

Amba K said...

seconds.. thirds and fourths...
beautiful

Gopal Sukumar said...

@ Am.
Thanks! :)

Blade bala said...

Nice poem Goalaa!

Maapla! I sincerely hope that you don't become one of those ordinary poets who always write about "Love". Atleast don't keep that as your forte. I think when you can blog, try to make it count.

Gopal Sukumar said...

:) I am not the one you are talking about. Try to look at it as an incident with some emotions.

Most poets try to delve into the intricacies of the emotions of either the Men, Machines, the Nature and the likes. I tried to do that.

And did I talk about or glorify "Love" or did I exaggerate the lady keeping myself as the first person? If Yes, What you say just holds good. :)

Srihari Srinivasan said...

Hey Gops!

Nice poem; wonderfully developed to the end. As I have read a few poems (maybe one or two) of yours earlier, this repetition of the initial idea "Waiting at the bell" feels to be more clichéd to me than an idiosyncratic literary tool of yours.

I would definitely want to see from you a structurally very different poem next.

Gopal Sukumar said...

@Sri:
Nice observation Sir. :) Point taken.

Ramya Ramani said...

"priceless liquid crystals rolling over his cheeks, and
hers was denser " -- Says it all.

Gopal Sukumar said...

@ Ramya:
Yes. Says it all:

"She conquered; Yet she was conquered." :)

Nandita Ravi said...

priceless liquid crystals rolling over his cheeks, and
hers was denser - Just amazing!!!THis was something that was refreshingly different!

Thanks for ur comments on my blog!!

Iday said...

I know i'm doing this TOOOOO late - but it just got time to even get to your blog, thanks to the winter break.

this is a very nice attempt. the premise is very common in literature, but also very powerful because it is easy to relate to :) i liked your descriptive and often narrative style. and as others have pointed out, some nice arrangements.

not sure if it is just me, but i believe you could make this more impactful by making it tighter. also, not sure if it is style - but it looks force fitted into a structure. next time, just let the words flow...